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twin sister

You lump of floral
bedding, in a room with
two beds. Sometimes

you crawled into mine anyway.
I hated it when Mom rooted
through our closet—who said
you could come in my bed—

but I let you, you always helped me
pick out perfumes and whispered
in my powdered ear before those dances.

after it was done
with the boy you never slept with
me. I never cried. I never said

I loved you anyway, you
never-possibility, you
little red shadow.
©2009 ~ruffienne
:iconruffienne:

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NaPo2

notes: revise from a distanced 1st pers. narrator.
don't be so literal.

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:iconroseofchaos:
ooooooooooo

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"I carry your heart with me (I carry it in my heart)."
-e.e. cummings

R + C

Curiosity didn't kill the cat. It made the kittens :3
:iconordie:
very nice play of double-meanings and enjambment, both at the beginning and at the end. ambiguity is fabulous!

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φιλοπαίσμονες γὰρ καὶ οἱ θεοί
:iconruffienne:
Thank you sir/madam! <3

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Words, colors, light, sound, stone, wood, bronze belong to the living artist. They belong to anyone who can use them. Loot the Louvre!... Steal anything in sight.
--William Burroughs
:iconordie:
I am a he. Call me Miguel.

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φιλοπαίσμονες γὰρ καὶ οἱ θεοί
:iconruffienne:
Okay. Thank you Miguel! Much appreciated. (I'm Caroline.)

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Words, colors, light, sound, stone, wood, bronze belong to the living artist. They belong to anyone who can use them. Loot the Louvre!... Steal anything in sight.
--William Burroughs

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